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Friday, February 23, 2007

Essay #2 _ It's time for a change, sisters! (Final Draft)

All Guess wants to do is depicting its Marciano brand as a striking, sophisticated and luxurious collection of clothing. However, its ad seems to represent a lot more than that. The center of the ad is a beautiful woman, with her revealing lingerie on and her hair is beautifully done. She is kneeling on an exotic and oriental-looking couch, a man sitting right beside her, his hand lying on her tiny waist. Despite of the beautiful setting and clothing that she has on, the woman seems to want something else as she looks away from the man, avoiding eye contact. I feel like she doesn't accept the situation she is in but there is nothing she can do about it because that's just what our culture expected from women. Gender inequality forces Americans to view women as objects that can be owned by men, as shown in the Guess advertisement.

More than a century has passed since Susan B. Anthony started the women's right revolution. Yet, gender inequality is still an issue in modern society. It appears to be something that would never change. Men would always be more superior to women. For example, in Aristotle's Metaphysics, the Greeks associate male gender with light and good while female is connected with dark and bad. Similarly, the system of opposite in Chinese philosophy, called the Yin and Yang, associate Yin with female, which are even and darkness whereas Yang are male, odd and light. Even though there're differences between the two systems, the males always ended up with higher prestige. For example, the Greek male is "resting" and the female is "moving", according to Aristotle's Metaphysics, while the Chinese male is active and the female is passive. Apparently, active is better than passive. However, for the Greeks, to be free of all motion is superior to being a subject of motion. After all, despite thirty years of feminist activism and much social change, virtually every important political, social, culture, and economic institution is still dominated by men. For example, the United States has yet to have a female president and only since January fourth of 2007 that this nation has a woman as Speaker of the House of Representative.

Regardless of all the sour facts and obstacles against women, we have come a long way. Yet, the men are still more superior. Unless one has been in a la-la land, I think every person must at least once wonder why society always places men in front of women. One of the reasons is described through the ad of Guess. Women are expected to be no more than objects, especially sex-relating objects. The woman in the ad is wearing lacey lingerie and she has animal-print shoes on, which can only be interpreted as sexual appeal to men. She's so beautiful with her makeup perfectly done, along with her gorgeous hair and yet, she seems so empty. There is no emotion in her face, no eye contact, nothing. She looks like a life-sized doll with human flesh and no soul. But that's okay because society doesn't expect much from her anyway. For example, there wouldn't be any surprise for a girl to get married right after high school and spend the rest of her life, cooking dinner for her husband and cleaning the house. In the end, as society stays men-dominated, women continue to be seen as objects, without motivation to follow her heart or intelligence to think for herself, no matter how far away it is from the truth.

As a woman who is working hard to earn her place in society, it’s intolerable for me to accept gender inequality. It’s not fair for a woman to work twice as hard as a man and still ended up lower in this world. It’s time for a change, sisters. It might be hard to achieve gender inequality but it’s not impossible. From Elizabeth Cady Stanton to Alice Paul, American women have done it. They have fought for the rights of American women everywhere. But that’s not enough. The battle is not over. Recently, I’ve read an article about a Manhattan woman, who was fired from financial powerhouse Lehman Brothers Inc. because she was assertive and conducted herself in the manner her boss though only men should. She filed for complaint and Lehman Brothers is reviewing the paper and the company is committed to providing a respectful and inclusive work environment for all its employees. That’s just one story out of thousands when it comes to gender inequality and how society is treating women unfairly. America women need to keep on fighting, fight for her rights, for her future, for the future of her daughters and granddaughters. It is time to demand the power an American woman deserves, the power of equality.

From having more gray matters to being able to do things that men can't possibly do, women are capable of achieving so much more than society assumed. Just because the culture expects women to stand still and look pretty doesn't mean women have to do just that. So to all my sisters out there, the sky is the limits. Gender inequality forces America to treat women as sex objects but with determination, intelligence, and girl power, I know American women are bounded to come out on top.

2 Comments:

Blogger quacker89 said...

For essay number two, my thesis has become more arguable and specific.I also tried to stay close to the topic, keeping my thesis as concise as possible. I think having a topic and started off with a thesis and write the essay after having a thesis is much better than wirte the essay first and then create the thesis. However, this time I think it is harder for me to start writing the essay because I have so much more room to move and therefore, I don't know what to do first. For essay number 3, I think I would try to be more concise. Also, I would probably pick a topic that is not as well know to people so I feel the need to be more specific, since in essay #2, I wrote about gender inequality, which everyone know about, causing me to avoid explaining and being details since everything seem obvious and need no explaination.

12:34 PM  
Blogger Craig McKenney said...

Where is the attention getter? Hint: there isn't one. You jump right into the question of the paper, and that is not working for grabbing my attention.

The thesis is wordy at the end. You need to simplify it to something like "Guess Jeans new advertising campaign presents women as sex objects."

By the topic sentence in Paragraph 2, it should be about Susan B. Anthony. Yet it isn't. So you need to really be conscious about your elements of the paper.

Paragraph 2 is also filled with off-topic stuff like Susan B. Anthony and Artistotle. Why is that there? What does that have to do with gender inequality? What does it have to do with your Guess ad, for that matter!?

You have failed to even discuss the ad in your essay. The point of the essay is MEDIA ANALYSIS. Where have you even mentioned it except in the thesis? This means you have failed to support your main argument since you haven't mentioned the ad.

11:32 PM  

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